Sweetness, I Was Only Joking

[redbrunja]

gacked from boosette :

Give me the title of a story I've never written, and feedback telling me what you liked best about it, and I will tell you any of: the first sentence, the last sentence, the thing that made me want to write it, the biggest problem I had while writing it, why it almost never got posted, the scene that hit the cutting room floor but that I wish I'd been able to salvage, or something else that I want readers to know.

(Bonus points if you do not specify a Naruto fic I did not write. Internet cookies if you choose some of my more obscure fandoms. Not that you have to, of course. If we only have one big fandom in common or you really want to hear about a fic I didn't write in that fandom, it's totally fine.)

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[nimblnymph.livejournal.com]

Fandom: Soul Eater (hey, it's not Naruto *grins*)

Title: To Freely Bloom

Pairing: Tsubaki/Mifune (can I have internet cookies for a rare pairing choice?)

What I love about this story is pretty much what you're trademarked for: simple, effective lines and description. It's elegant but not overdone. I adore how much you say about their relationship through the little details.

*grins* This was a fun one!

[redbrunja.livejournal.com]

You totally get an internet cookie.

First line: Tsubaki was three days past her sixteenth birthday when Black*Star died.

Last line: Mifune turned away from the sunset filling the windows, his eyes seeking out Tsubaki's form, her body shadowed and hair falling free.

The biggest problem I had writing this was figuring out which characters were relevant to Tsubaki's and Mifune's arc, especially once Black*Star was out of the picture.

This almost didn't get posted because I really wallow (almost fetishize) Tsubaki's youth in relation to Mifune. I hesitated before I posted.