Sweetness, I Was Only Joking

[redbrunja]

gacked from boosette :

Give me the title of a story I've never written, and feedback telling me what you liked best about it, and I will tell you any of: the first sentence, the last sentence, the thing that made me want to write it, the biggest problem I had while writing it, why it almost never got posted, the scene that hit the cutting room floor but that I wish I'd been able to salvage, or something else that I want readers to know.

(Bonus points if you do not specify a Naruto fic I did not write. Internet cookies if you choose some of my more obscure fandoms. Not that you have to, of course. If we only have one big fandom in common or you really want to hear about a fic I didn't write in that fandom, it's totally fine.)

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[plural-entity.livejournal.com]

Title: The Little Moon.
Fandom: Tortall/Tamora Pierce.
Pairing: I don't know if you've read Terrier or Bloodhound yet, so I'll say George/Alanna. But if you've read either of the Beka Cooper novels, totally Rosto/Beka.


Personally, I loved all the little details. The way you describe even the mundane makes me feel like I'm really there. And with just the tiniest of phrasing you really say a lot about their relationship. Plus, you have a way of just making the pair seem so sexy together without it always being about sex. (=

[redbrunja.livejournal.com]

First Line: Rosto had told himself that being his lover would give Beka advantages in her line of work, and that he was the one who would need to be more careful. As Beka's blood dripped down his wrist, he was confronted with how very, very wrong he was.

Last line: Goodvin shoved him against the wall, leaned close. "The next time I see you, I'll take your damned ears myself."

Why I almost didn't post it: I worried that with Beka off-stage most of the time, the relationship between her and Rosto wouldn't have the weight it needed.