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redbrunja ([personal profile] redbrunja) wrote2009-05-31 11:32 pm
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Fic: "You Choke Behind A Smile"

Title: You Choke Behind A Smile
Author: redbrunja
Fandom: Naruto
Rating: NC-17
Author's Note: This fic is... odd. And while the tenses are supposed to be all creative and dramatic, they might just be screwy. Also, long sentences like whoa. Written because there has been a painful lack of Kakashi/Sakura lately.
Characters: Kakashi/Sakura
Summary: Sooner or later, she'd break. Kakashi was sure of it.

Sooner or later, she'd break. Kakashi was sure of it.

Since Sasuke's return, since he'd rejoined Team 7, Sakura had been tense. Kakashi didn't think she even knew how much pressure she was under, with the way she kept smiling at Sasuke, keep making him bentos, keep pressing her lips together instead of chattering on as they all ate ramen after a mission.

Just one more time - if Sasuke would step between Sakura and enemy nin just one more time, surely she'd snap. She'd snap and Sasuke's teeth would be on the ground, she'd snap and yell so loudly that she'd be repairing their eardrums after she calmed down, she'd snap and wipe that dismissive, possessive look right of the Uchiha's face.

But no. It appeared that the smart, confident kunoichi who had fought Sasori of the Desert and directed repairs of Konoha had permanently vanished into a pale, passive, ghost of herself. He'd watch her grit her teeth, clench her fists until the leather of her gloves moaned, stare at the ground like Icha Icha was written in the dirt, and yet she continued to act like she was continually auditioning for the role of Uchiha Sakura.

Kakashi never thought he'd say this, but he missed her 12-year-old, obsessive self. At least that girl had been someone unique and not just the perfect wife for Sasuke.

He knew she was going to break.

Sooner or later.

But when it happened, he was taken completely by surprise.

In his defense, he'd expected violence. Massive, property-damaging violence. He'd never dreamed that she would show up on his doorstep after midnight and that when he invited her in, she'd kick off her boots, take one step forward to put the tips of her toes against his and shove her hand down his pants.

And he'd - he'd just thrust his hips against her, forced more of himself into her hand. He'd yanked down his mask, kissed her hard, biting at her bottom lip and drawing blood. She'd gasped and when he'd yanked down her black shorts, shoving her against his door, she'd merely wrapped her arms around his neck and held on while he fucked her.

Sasuke gives her a band of gold, a single ruby in the center and her back is flat against the mushy, waterlogged ground of Training Ground 10 while she grinds against Kakashi, making little needy noises in the back of her throat. Her fingers clench at the back of his shirt, the tips of her fingernails pricking his skin.

The rain patters on the grass around them, on the leaves over them and he unfastens his pants, pushes them down irritably. Sakura lifts herself, running her wet slit along his head until he pins her hips to the ground and penetrates her with a thrust that has her neck arcing back, raindrops sliding down the column of her throat.

She's wild now, clawing at his back, tugging at his hair, gasping oh please sensei more, and then she clenches around him, thighs shaking and the breath caught in her lungs.

He knew she'd break.

But Kakashi had never expected her to shatter like this, to live her life like she was someone else and fuck him with another man's ring on her finger while he selfishly clung to whatever shards of Haruno Sakura he could get his hands on.
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[identity profile] ereluna.livejournal.com 2009-06-03 03:20 pm (UTC)(link)
I can't really see a fight like that happening unless it was between two type-A girls... like Sakura and Ino, and even then, I would hope that they wouldn't set aside their friendship again once Sasuke comes back because, frankly, he doesn't deserve it.

I do prefer NaruSaku over SasuSaku, but it would be a miracle -and an outrage to the SasuSakus out there- if Sakura and Kakashi was canon. XD

That is completely correct. The bad guys always redeem themselves, from Zabuza all the way up to the newest. It's quite unrealistic... even though Kishi tries his best to make the idea plausible. Itachi may have indirectly saved the ninja world from war, but there's no excuse for killing your entire family. That, to me, is unredeemable.

But, it's all Kishi.

I would hope that Sasuke goes out like that. But, I think Kishi's -almost- obsession for Sasuke prevents him from doing so. It's completely disappointing, because Sasuke will probably get everything he wants while doing all the wrong things, and characters like Kakashi who fight tooth and nail for the people they love get the short end of the stick.

p.s.s. Yeah! ^^ Can't wait for it... gonna get a plushie... of some type.

[identity profile] redbrunja.livejournal.com 2009-06-03 03:37 pm (UTC)(link)
*nods*

Yeah, Hinata and Sakura (in relation to Hinata) don't have the personality to get all competitive regarding Naruto. And I would hope that Ino and Sakura would value their renewed friendship enough not to drag their dumb Sasuke-rivalry back into things.

Honestly, I would HATE it if Kishimoto made Kakashi/Sakura canon. There is no way Kishimoto is a good enough writer to make it not read as squicky as hell, regardless of the fact that it's my OTP. Sai/Sakura is what I would KILL to see as canon. They respect each other, work well together, and he's clearly crushing on her hardcore. Plus, it would be such a poke in the eye to Sasuke - to come back to Konoha and find Sakura doing someone who's like him with a personality upgrade.

[identity profile] redbrunja.livejournal.com 2009-06-03 03:49 pm (UTC)(link)
Late comment is late, but obviously I do not mind the nitpicky corrections and I've friended you back!
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[identity profile] ereluna.livejournal.com 2009-06-03 04:15 pm (UTC)(link)
I think it's unlikely that there would be another Sasuke-rivalry coming between Ino and Sakura, because I hope that they've moved on. Kishi may make Sakura all head over heels again, but I really don't see Ino hovering over Sasuke now. She's... I don't know... She strikes me as being a bit more independent than Sakura. But, I love them both. ^^

I agree. KakaSaku is best left in the hands of those that know it best. -Which is hilariously ironic, because I don't think Kishi knows Kakashi as well as the fanfic writers do.- XD

SaiSaku has never crossed my mind, I have to say... but, I does sound absolutely adorable. I do believe he is crushing on her, now that I look back... A poke in the eye might be nice for Sasuke. Sai is totally badass in his own right... Bonds totally rocked because of him.

[identity profile] redbrunja.livejournal.com 2009-06-03 09:58 pm (UTC)(link)
*nods*

Yeah, I think Ino is both a.) more independent than Sakura b.) more realistic and c.) cared much, much less about Sasuke.

I agree. KakaSaku is best left in the hands of those that know it best. -Which is hilariously ironic, because I don't think Kishi knows Kakashi as well as the fanfic writers do.- XD

*snerk* I think a lot of times, the (good) fanficcers have a better grasp on the characters than Kishimoto does.

I am totally hardcore about Sai x Sakura. It's not even funny. I've shipped them every since Sakura laid him out across the road, and I adore their relationship to bits.
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[identity profile] ereluna.livejournal.com 2009-06-03 11:00 pm (UTC)(link)
Completely agree. I love Ino's personality. It's sad because she doesn't show up half as much as she used to. In fact, all the females have quietly slipped into the background, which annoys me to no end...

They do. The best fanfic writers outdo Kishi on any day of the week. XD I'd say you are one of those authors.

^^ I'll have to check it out then. I've seen a few fics, so I might go back and read them. Any recommendations?

[identity profile] redbrunja.livejournal.com 2009-06-04 06:43 am (UTC)(link)
I SO wish Ino had done more in the last arc. *shakes head* what a wasted opportunity.

*blushes* Well, thank you!

As for Sai x Sakura... I've written a handful (just click my fanfic tag), [livejournal.com profile] ivy_chan and [livejournal.com profile] digthenym write fanfic, [livejournal.com profile] onerottenpeach has drawn a couple (see icon), and there's also these:

http://www.fanfiction.net/s/4779198/1/Once_More_With_Feeling

http://www.fanfiction.net/s/4736764/1/Home

http://www.fanfiction.net/s/4385051/1/Loathing

After that, check out my ff.net favorites and my lj memories.

Enjoy!

[identity profile] redbrunja.livejournal.com 2009-06-04 07:08 am (UTC)(link)
Thank you!

[identity profile] redbrunja.livejournal.com 2009-06-04 07:18 am (UTC)(link)
Well, thank you! And yes, I'm still reading Yankee-kun to Megane-chan... but I'm a couple chapters behind - I need to catch up!

[identity profile] redbrunja.livejournal.com 2009-06-04 07:43 am (UTC)(link)
Thank you! And presumably everyone is busy busy busy but I need my Kakashi/Sakura fic while I'm busy busy busy!

[identity profile] redbrunja.livejournal.com 2009-06-04 07:43 am (UTC)(link)
Too true!

[identity profile] redbrunja.livejournal.com 2009-06-04 07:45 am (UTC)(link)
He should. He really needs to DO something to get Sakura to wake up - and Sakura needs to be on the ball enough to listen.

[identity profile] redbrunja.livejournal.com 2009-06-04 07:56 am (UTC)(link)
I think I wrote this specifically so, if the worst happens, I already have it firmly embedded in my head that she's nailing Kakashi.
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[identity profile] ereluna.livejournal.com 2009-06-04 03:46 pm (UTC)(link)
It's such a shame.

No problem! Just the truth. ^^

And a mega-thanks for the links! I will be reading these, most definitely.

[identity profile] redbrunja.livejournal.com 2009-06-04 03:50 pm (UTC)(link)
You're welcome!

[identity profile] redbrunja.livejournal.com 2009-06-04 08:27 pm (UTC)(link)
It does cheat them both. And while I am not the biggest fan of Sasuke, it's utterly not his fault that this is happening. Regardless of what Sasuke wants, Sakura is the one folding herself up to be this different person.

[identity profile] redbrunja.livejournal.com 2009-06-04 08:35 pm (UTC)(link)
Thank you so much for your review! And if you find any Kakashi/Sakura fluff, let me know.

[identity profile] eustacia-vye28.livejournal.com 2009-07-11 03:00 am (UTC)(link)
I found you through [livejournal.com profile] aliaspiral's Slacker's Remix. And OMG this is hot. I don't even know what season it was when I stopped watching Naruto (After Sasuke was taken, and the chases that followed), but I don't even need to know what actually happened to read this.

Smoking hot. I can so see this.

[identity profile] redbrunja.livejournal.com 2009-07-11 03:24 pm (UTC)(link)
Well, thank you very much! I'm glad you found this hot, and yeah, you really don't need to know much about anything that's happened recently to understand this fic.

[identity profile] eustacia-vye28.livejournal.com 2009-07-11 08:33 pm (UTC)(link)
I was poking around and reading some others of your Kakashi/Sakura fics. Now I feel dumb for not seeing this before, because they were all so pitch perfect. :)

[identity profile] redbrunja.livejournal.com 2009-07-12 11:03 pm (UTC)(link)
Well, thank you very much!

[identity profile] tcregan.livejournal.com 2010-05-21 06:28 am (UTC)(link)
Been trying to find good Sakura/Kakashi smut. They're not even my favorite pairing and I'm not usually a big het fan at all, but... I bookmarked this. This was hot. It was desperate and needy and the fact that she really doesn't care for her life with Sasuke makes me giddy.

And amazingly in character, too, which is what a lot of Sakura/Kakashi lacks. Nicely done.

[identity profile] redbrunja.livejournal.com 2010-05-26 07:39 am (UTC)(link)
Thank you so much for this comment! I means a lot to me when people who don't normally go for a pairing like what I've written.

I'm thrilled you enjoyed reading! (And I can't imagine Sakura would end up satisfied by just being Uchiha Sasuke's wife.)

[identity profile] pisquenta.livejournal.com 2010-05-30 10:21 pm (UTC)(link)
I've always thought that Sakura wouldn't go for Sasuke in the end, which is pretty much why I feel really weird reading fics with Sasu/Saku pairing. Tend to avoid them like the plague.

[identity profile] redbrunja.livejournal.com 2010-06-09 08:24 am (UTC)(link)
I hope Sakura won't end up with Sasuke, but I kind of feel like that's the pairing Kishimoto is writing.

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