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redbrunja ([personal profile] redbrunja) wrote2009-05-31 11:32 pm
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Fic: "You Choke Behind A Smile"

Title: You Choke Behind A Smile
Author: redbrunja
Fandom: Naruto
Rating: NC-17
Author's Note: This fic is... odd. And while the tenses are supposed to be all creative and dramatic, they might just be screwy. Also, long sentences like whoa. Written because there has been a painful lack of Kakashi/Sakura lately.
Characters: Kakashi/Sakura
Summary: Sooner or later, she'd break. Kakashi was sure of it.

Sooner or later, she'd break. Kakashi was sure of it.

Since Sasuke's return, since he'd rejoined Team 7, Sakura had been tense. Kakashi didn't think she even knew how much pressure she was under, with the way she kept smiling at Sasuke, keep making him bentos, keep pressing her lips together instead of chattering on as they all ate ramen after a mission.

Just one more time - if Sasuke would step between Sakura and enemy nin just one more time, surely she'd snap. She'd snap and Sasuke's teeth would be on the ground, she'd snap and yell so loudly that she'd be repairing their eardrums after she calmed down, she'd snap and wipe that dismissive, possessive look right of the Uchiha's face.

But no. It appeared that the smart, confident kunoichi who had fought Sasori of the Desert and directed repairs of Konoha had permanently vanished into a pale, passive, ghost of herself. He'd watch her grit her teeth, clench her fists until the leather of her gloves moaned, stare at the ground like Icha Icha was written in the dirt, and yet she continued to act like she was continually auditioning for the role of Uchiha Sakura.

Kakashi never thought he'd say this, but he missed her 12-year-old, obsessive self. At least that girl had been someone unique and not just the perfect wife for Sasuke.

He knew she was going to break.

Sooner or later.

But when it happened, he was taken completely by surprise.

In his defense, he'd expected violence. Massive, property-damaging violence. He'd never dreamed that she would show up on his doorstep after midnight and that when he invited her in, she'd kick off her boots, take one step forward to put the tips of her toes against his and shove her hand down his pants.

And he'd - he'd just thrust his hips against her, forced more of himself into her hand. He'd yanked down his mask, kissed her hard, biting at her bottom lip and drawing blood. She'd gasped and when he'd yanked down her black shorts, shoving her against his door, she'd merely wrapped her arms around his neck and held on while he fucked her.

Sasuke gives her a band of gold, a single ruby in the center and her back is flat against the mushy, waterlogged ground of Training Ground 10 while she grinds against Kakashi, making little needy noises in the back of her throat. Her fingers clench at the back of his shirt, the tips of her fingernails pricking his skin.

The rain patters on the grass around them, on the leaves over them and he unfastens his pants, pushes them down irritably. Sakura lifts herself, running her wet slit along his head until he pins her hips to the ground and penetrates her with a thrust that has her neck arcing back, raindrops sliding down the column of her throat.

She's wild now, clawing at his back, tugging at his hair, gasping oh please sensei more, and then she clenches around him, thighs shaking and the breath caught in her lungs.

He knew she'd break.

But Kakashi had never expected her to shatter like this, to live her life like she was someone else and fuck him with another man's ring on her finger while he selfishly clung to whatever shards of Haruno Sakura he could get his hands on.

[identity profile] sub-textual.livejournal.com 2009-06-01 07:35 am (UTC)(link)
Whew. Pretty goddamn hot. *_* But uh. I think the rating needs to be boosted to R.

[identity profile] a-lifestyle.livejournal.com 2009-06-01 07:41 am (UTC)(link)
Oh thank Jesus, you too. D:
I've been dying for Kakasaku lately. Thank you, thank you.

But Kakashi had never expected her to shatter like this
One-two, punch to the gut, and I love this.

[identity profile] oceansex.livejournal.com 2009-06-01 07:48 am (UTC)(link)
Very hot, very sad. Gah. Why must the Uchiha ruin everything? ;_; Gotta love Kakashi for not saying a word about it aloud though. The man enjoys torturing himself.

And a lack of Kakashi/Sakura? I must help remedy this!

[identity profile] sowell.livejournal.com 2009-06-01 12:51 pm (UTC)(link)
:( Awesome as usual, but so sad. Kakashi should forget his honor for a little and launch some wacky scheme to break them up, rom-com style.

Poor Sakura. Kakashi didn't think she even knew how much pressure she was under, with the way she kept smiling at Sasuke, keep making him bentos, keep pressing her lips together instead of chattering on as they all ate ramen after a mission.

Ugh, heartbreaking. If Sasuke comes home and she doesn't punch him through the nearest wall, I think I'll cry. I'm using my badass Sakura icon to make me feel better.

[identity profile] redbrunja.livejournal.com 2009-06-01 03:47 pm (UTC)(link)
Oops! Yep, that should have been rated much higher. Thanks for catching that.

And I'm glad that you enjoyed this.

[identity profile] redbrunja.livejournal.com 2009-06-01 03:48 pm (UTC)(link)
I know! I swear, you and nimbl are the only people writing it right now and I'm dying.

Thanks for the review!

[identity profile] redbrunja.livejournal.com 2009-06-01 03:50 pm (UTC)(link)
Well, in Sasuke's defense, it's not his fault Sakura is forcing herself to be someone else. And I'm on the fence about Kakashi. In a way, hearing 'snap out of it!' might be good for Sakura.... but she probably wouldn't listen.

Please do!

[identity profile] redbrunja.livejournal.com 2009-06-01 03:52 pm (UTC)(link)
Thank you! And I think Kakashi's honor is pretty tarnished at the mo. And I think his schemes would involve sticking Sakura's head in a bucket of ice water. Or taking her on lots of dangerous S-rank missions, just the two of them.

Ugh, heartbreaking. If Sasuke comes home and she doesn't punch him through the nearest wall, I think I'll cry. I'm using my badass Sakura icon to make me feel better.

I actually wrote this because as heartbreaking as it is, part of me really thinks this is what's going to happen in canon when Sasuke returns.

(Uses badass Sakura icon to make myself feel better.)

[identity profile] devimelete.livejournal.com 2009-06-01 04:04 pm (UTC)(link)
Kakashi never thought he'd say this, but he missed her 12-year-old, obsessive self.

Because at least she shows her passion truly and purposely, right. You break me with this sentence alone.


(oh sweet jesus woman now I'm off to find some KakaSaku fluff.)

[identity profile] hungrytiger11.livejournal.com 2009-06-01 04:41 pm (UTC)(link)
Its hot but so sad to think that... well, I could see that happening. Sakura suddenly acting like someone else who is quiet and submissive and can't fight her own battles all to get Sasuke back. Which cheats them both.

Gorgeous piece though.

[identity profile] terraminuit.livejournal.com 2009-06-01 04:42 pm (UTC)(link)
...If this is what really happens in canon (not the part with Kakashi, but the rest) I'll break down in tears. I love Sakura's character and will and to have her lose it would devastating. I'm already mad at Kishi about her recent development. This would just break my heart.

[identity profile] thatreevesgirl.livejournal.com 2009-06-01 07:08 pm (UTC)(link)
That was so nice! *__* I really enjoyed it. I could see Sakura doing something just like that if Sasuke were to come back, and it would kill her. I agree with sowell that Kakashi should try and break that crap up. XD

[identity profile] wildwesternwind.livejournal.com 2009-06-01 07:13 pm (UTC)(link)
This makes me want to whip out my KakaSaku stick it to Sasuke fic again despite the fact i posted it ages ago.

And yes, there needs to be more KakaSaku-- not only because their dynamics are wonderful, but also cause its a wonderful kind of badhottwrong.

[identity profile] surmise.livejournal.com 2009-06-01 07:24 pm (UTC)(link)

[identity profile] onerottenpeach.livejournal.com 2009-06-01 08:06 pm (UTC)(link)
asdfghwifjsgk!! This was too good! You really hit the spot with dysfunctional relationship fic.

Also have you been reading Yankee-kun to Megane-chan? 48 just came out on onemanga, and it's getting pretty interesting. And there's some cute Shinagawa/Adachi bits!

[identity profile] darkxkunoichi.livejournal.com 2009-06-01 08:26 pm (UTC)(link)
that last line just kills me, but i just can't not love it.

[identity profile] digthenym.livejournal.com 2009-06-01 08:27 pm (UTC)(link)
I loved this! You really capture how Sasuke brings out the bad qualities in Sakura, and you can really feel Kakashi's restraint throughout the fic. At the end you just kind of want to give them both hugs and hits to the back of the head.

Awesome story! <3

[identity profile] raspina.livejournal.com 2009-06-01 08:53 pm (UTC)(link)
In the moments like this, you make me feel bad about SasuSaku being my OTP. Sakura simply deserves better.
This fic just broke my heart. I don't want it to end like this. I may be an idealist and believe in people's goodness, but it would be so wrong.

Also, thank you for KakaSaku, I missed it ;)

[identity profile] a-lifestyle.livejournal.com 2009-06-01 09:35 pm (UTC)(link)
I second this. <3 <3 <3

[identity profile] nekokatsu.livejournal.com 2009-06-01 10:01 pm (UTC)(link)
THANK YOU. There has been a severe lack of KakaSaku lately. I feel like I've been walking through a desert with no water. <3

[identity profile] zelha.livejournal.com 2009-06-01 10:15 pm (UTC)(link)
This was simply awesome. :D

[identity profile] redbrunja.livejournal.com 2009-06-01 10:17 pm (UTC)(link)
Thank you.

[identity profile] syl-luvs-silver.livejournal.com 2009-06-01 11:23 pm (UTC)(link)
Simply amazing. Your writing is really powerful - I could pick it apart and each line would stand out on its own. Not quite sure why, but I especially loved this part: He'd watch her grit her teeth, clench her fists until the leather of her gloves moaned, stare at the ground like Icha Icha was written in the dirt, and yet she continued to act like she was continually auditioning for the role of Uchiha Sakura.

A small typo - 'she's snap'.

[identity profile] bluerising.livejournal.com 2009-06-02 01:25 am (UTC)(link)
Sweet jeezus, that was good! It's powerful, and there are a lot of fantastic lines, but I'd have to say the one is real heart-clencher. "...he selfishly clung to whatever shards of Haruno Sakura he could get his hands on."

Thanks for filling my Kakasaku fix for the day. ;)

[identity profile] beyondthemoor.livejournal.com 2009-06-02 02:59 am (UTC)(link)
(Followed the link from the comm, hope you don't mind!)

This is so good, in so many ways! (And kind of heart-breaking at Sakura's self-imposed 'leashing' of her real self.)

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