Speed-Beta Time

[redbrunja]

Okay, I'm writing my Sai-fic, and I want him to say something really insulting to Ino without realizing it.

Here's what I have so far:

Once, Sai had asked Ino why she persisted in pointlessly flaunting her sexual availability in front of a teammate who was clearly uninterested in her specifically and possibly the entire female gender. Ino had slapped him across the face and then attacked him with a kunai when he commented that she hit more more gently than Sakura did.

I honestly don't think that sounds quite bad enough. Basically, I want Sai to say something to the effect off: why do you act like an utter whore around Shikamaru when he's clearly either homosexual or revolted by your appearance?

Only it needs to be phrase more Sai-like.
 

Comments

[ivy-chan.livejournal.com]

'Writhing around like a bitch in heat' is always good, but I'm not sure about the 'bitch' bit. Realistically, it's just the technical name for a female dog, and I suppose Sai can be ignorant of the other use for it.

[queroli.livejournal.com]

The first image I got is of Sai asking if she got dropped on the head as a child.
I don't know if that helps or not... xD

[tobu-ishi.livejournal.com]

"Ino? May I ask you to clarify a point of social interaction for me? You frequently attempt to use advanced techniques of kunoichi seduction on your teammate, but I cannot deduce your purpose in doing so. He is an ally and does not require flummoxing. In any case, he consistently fails to respond to your overtures in any positive fashion. Are you in fact unaware of his disinterest, or do you regularly pursue these exercises in futility as a personal challenge?"

I dunno. I've never written Sai before--I have in fact read about three chapters of him, total. Lose. XD

Sai

[zareutajin.livejournal.com]

"You know, Ino, a girl could stake herself spread-eagle, naked and writhing on the floor of a bar called Gay Blind Eunuch, and she'd still go home alone."

[nimblnymph.livejournal.com]

Maybe something like:

"Once, Sai had called Ino stupid because she wasn't taking a very obvious hint; Nara Shikamaru wasn't into her. Whether that was because he liked more meat between the thighs or because Ino was just unattractive was up for debate... but it couldn't help that she looked like she made her money on a corner and NOT going on missions. Ino had slapped him across the face and then attacked him when he'd informed her that she hit much more gently than Sakura did."

Just an idea... sorry to hijack. Though... you really shouldn't be afraid of SOME crudeness to Sai. He's not exactly kosher in the mouth department with some of the things he says.