Just.... No.

[redbrunja]

Breasts are lovely things and there are many nice, hot things you can do with boobs in an R-rated fic.

However, when writing smut, you should never, ever, ever have a line like

"He nursed on her breast like a starving infant."

Because I don't care how hot things were before, now they're in a creepy pedophilic place and there's just no regaining that spark.

First, when writing a sex scene, don't go from a 'lover' place to a 'mother-child' place- I don't even care if you're writing incest (which this wasn't).

Secondly, 'nursing a breast' (pauses to let brain implode) wouldn't feel that sexy, imho. Or at least, it sounds the utter opposite of sexy. Nuzzle a breast. Nibble a breast. Hell you can bite, suck, lave, pinch, tease a breast.

Just don't nurse one, unless you're actually an infant and need milk for sustenance.

Also, a grown man should not be doing anything to his bedmate 'like a starving infant.'

Comments

[pretentioustfu.livejournal.com]

Oh yeah. I'm weird in that I like only either equality between couples OR entirely, admittedly fucked-up messes of pairings, and being someone pretty aware of gender issues, it's one reason I'm VERY selective on what het I like. It's even worse there than it is in slash, IMO, since a lot of writers go for either what I call the Suvian fallacy ("she's a girl, so she's just like me!") or the application of stereotypes that match the gender, but not the character (such as having a strong female character suddenly go all woobie and zomghelovesmeee because a man told her to shut up and leave him alone, or characterizing her as emotional and helpless, I've seen fic women who make weepy ukes look good *coughcough Meryl in 80 percent of Trigun fic*)

And yeah, it's pretty bad for het and slash alike. Once I thought maybe it was just my fandom since it's pretty attractive to people who *don't* want to consider how the writer subverted gender and orientation stereotypes and how it's now more sci-fi than the space western it started as and want to write traditional western. . . but it happens in almost every fandom I've seen.

[redbrunja.livejournal.com]

I haven't had too much trouble with het getting all out of character, but then I have some fandoms (like FMA) with some really good het writers. I mean, really good.

I've heard a lot of people who complain about the top/bottem dynamic in slash, and I think part of that is due to the inevidablity of someone being desinated that way if there's penetration.