Just.... No.

[redbrunja]

Breasts are lovely things and there are many nice, hot things you can do with boobs in an R-rated fic.

However, when writing smut, you should never, ever, ever have a line like

"He nursed on her breast like a starving infant."

Because I don't care how hot things were before, now they're in a creepy pedophilic place and there's just no regaining that spark.

First, when writing a sex scene, don't go from a 'lover' place to a 'mother-child' place- I don't even care if you're writing incest (which this wasn't).

Secondly, 'nursing a breast' (pauses to let brain implode) wouldn't feel that sexy, imho. Or at least, it sounds the utter opposite of sexy. Nuzzle a breast. Nibble a breast. Hell you can bite, suck, lave, pinch, tease a breast.

Just don't nurse one, unless you're actually an infant and need milk for sustenance.

Also, a grown man should not be doing anything to his bedmate 'like a starving infant.'

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[pretentioustfu.livejournal.com]

By the way, you seem like a fairly cool person. Mind if I friend you? Just tell me which of the filters you want to be on (fandom, personal, or both, though the great majority of my posts will be fandom), and I'll add you if you want. ^_^

[redbrunja.livejournal.com]

Oh, please, friend away! I've added you, and if you could put me on both fandom and personal that'd be great.

[pretentioustfu.livejournal.com]

*adds you to both* ^_^