Just.... No.

[redbrunja]

Breasts are lovely things and there are many nice, hot things you can do with boobs in an R-rated fic.

However, when writing smut, you should never, ever, ever have a line like

"He nursed on her breast like a starving infant."

Because I don't care how hot things were before, now they're in a creepy pedophilic place and there's just no regaining that spark.

First, when writing a sex scene, don't go from a 'lover' place to a 'mother-child' place- I don't even care if you're writing incest (which this wasn't).

Secondly, 'nursing a breast' (pauses to let brain implode) wouldn't feel that sexy, imho. Or at least, it sounds the utter opposite of sexy. Nuzzle a breast. Nibble a breast. Hell you can bite, suck, lave, pinch, tease a breast.

Just don't nurse one, unless you're actually an infant and need milk for sustenance.

Also, a grown man should not be doing anything to his bedmate 'like a starving infant.'

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Well, I have some books I just bought from amazon.com, so I should have something with some nice sex in it soon (Rachel Caine and vampires, it should be good).

I really enjoy fanfiction, and I've been really spoiled by FMA, Buffy and Harry Potter fandoms. Then I wander into Saiyuki and it's a scary, scary place.

There's something to be said for knowing that what you think of the characters comes directly from what you read, but the best fanfiction will make me look at a character in a new way, so even if I don't change my mind, it's fun.